You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
you
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to complain about your hotel service being inadequate and to improve for your future customers. I would like you to provide the details which I suffered from you that I stayed in your hotel
last
week and unfortunately,
due to
bad weather conditions, I cannot find a heating service in your hotel.
This
bad experience led me to sick and disrupted my business meeting. I would like to explain what happened on that day, I was thankful to my wife that she was prepared and took extra blankets for her safety reasons. Though she always carries it
while
we are on the trip.
Thus
, I would like you to take action and improve the facility service for the customers who might not get a cold or any flue issues that I had to catch
it
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due to
such
circumstances. I hope
this
complaint will be improved for the customers. Yours Faithfully, Hardik Mehta
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Provide more specific details about the incident, such as dates, duration of stay, or the exact temperature issues faced.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly and logically. Introduce the problem, describe the steps you took to manage, and then clearly state what action you want the hotel to take.
coherence cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and transition words to link ideas and paragraphs together more smoothly.
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The writing tone could be more formal by avoiding casual language, and ensure that you are direct and polite in your request for a resolution.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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