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Some people believe eating vegetables in diet is good not only for individual but for whole world. do what extent do u agree or disagree?

Some people eat vegetarian
diet
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 only and believe it to be useful not only for themselves, but
also
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 for the whole world. I agree with
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 opinion as the
diet
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 rich in vegetables has all the nutrition one requires for a balanced
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. It is argued by some people that a vegetarian
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 is essential for a healthy body.
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, it has all the essential vitamins and minerals our body requires for maintenance all the systems of the body.
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, the fibre in vegetables helps to prevent constipation and it is believed to have a protective effect against the cancer of the intestines,
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 meat whether it is from any animal is proven by research to be carcinogenic. So for a balanced
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, strictly veggies are essential and beneficial. Another positive aspect of the vegan
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 is that it is economical for the consumer as well the country. They are cheaper to purchase compared to other
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 and their cooking do not require expensive oil.
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, people irrespective of their socioeconomic status can purchase and eat a vegetarian
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.
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, the vegetarian
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 is favoured by animal rights activists who believe human beings do not have the right to slaughter any animal for filling up their stomachs. They think it is unethical to kill animals and should be declared illegal as the alternate foods like vegetables are available.
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, the flora are saved while we consume fauna for eating. In conclusion, consuming fruits and vegetables by individuals is useful not only for the individual in terms of health benefits, but
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 to the whole world in terms of the economy and saving animal kingdoms.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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