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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well

#people #risks
Achieving success in
life
 is not easy and to do that, one has to overcome many obstacles. To become an achiever in
life
, some people explore different ways and some don't. According to me, if
someone
 can take up new challenges,
then
 only he or she becomes successful. Because by doing
this
, they can explore different opportunities and can face many adverse situations to overcome. Experiment with different things can unlock lots of new opportunities. For an example, Founder of Apple, Steve Jobs, has not stopped discovering only MacBook. He invents iPhone and makes many breakthroughs in the field of technology. Choosing a particular thing throughout the whole
life
, does not make any sense as trying out new scopes
also
 unlock many new skill set which
someone
 can excel more rather than other things he has tried before.
Also
, to get rid of monotonous
life
, we have to try out new fields. On the other side, we cannot call a person successful if he or she has not faced many different barriers and overcome it. The challenge will be different every time when
someone
 explores new ideas, and they have to try hard and hard until they achieve something.
Also
 a person can understand which skill suits him or her best by doing above. Not only
this
, but
also
 it helps to build the character of a person strongly and helps
someone
 to take never give up approach. To sum it up, success is not something which is easily available. To gain it,
someone
 has to try out new things, challenge themselves and never back down from road blocks in the way of
life
. Those who are satisfied with the stability and never want to take the risk, success is not for them. We have many examples in front of us, and we have to follow those to climb the peak of our dreams by exploring new branches.

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