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Success in business can be assured if you have great marketing and promotion. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We are living in an era which is marked by
digital revolution
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the digital revolution
. From the daily routines to
business
 digital world
has impacted
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is impacting
 everything. With
this
 change, some people believe that for a
business
 to be successful, it must have excellent marketing and promotion. In my opinion, advertising is always the
second
 most important thing,
primary
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primarily
being focusing
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focussing
focus
have focused
focused
 on the main
product
/ service. Marketing a
business
 has great benefits.
Firstly
, a large group of people get to know about it. Obviously, the more the awareness, more will be your customers.
Secondly
, it brings customers on the right side. A customer is able to make
more knowledge able guess
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a more knowledgeable guess
more knowledgeable guess
more knowledgeable guesses
 of the
product
 after seeing an advertisement.
Thirdly
, a market space gets created for the
business
.
For instance
, when android phones came, they were not the utmost priority
of
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for
 everyone. It was because of their promotion that they got noticed and their need was felt.
However
, simply having promoted a
product
 is not enough. One surely gets to know about the
business but
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business, but
 after a certain time, it all depends on how good the
product
/service is. Even more, if the marketing team promotes a
product
 in a way
that is
 different from the actual
product
, it leads to distrust among consumers about the
business
. Overall, in my opinion, we as individuals are quick to make decisions and the marketing of a
product
surely plays
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surely play
 a very important role.
However
, it is not the only deciding factor. The final success of a
business
 depends both on the efficiency of
product
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the product
 and its marketing.

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