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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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Due to the modern society, many people hold a belief that students should study subjects to pass examinations rather than gaining life skills,
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 as dress up or cookery. To my point of view, I strongly disagree with that idea because of these following reasons.
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 of all, much of the knowledge related to academic subjects can only use to pass an examination or complete
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 tests but can not practical application.
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, in Vietnam, students have to learn many complex math equations in
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 which cannot be applied in daily life but can only be used for passing exams.
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, gain living skills provide them self-confident and well-rounded. 
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, when college teenagers live far from family, they will be able to take care of themselves if they are equipped
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 skills. Since they can prepare healthy and affordable meals independently, they do not need to buy food outside which can contain a lot of fat and sugar.
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, they can choose suitable outfits to make a positive impression on potential employers when attending an interview or make themselves attractive when taking part in a party. Attending skill-building classes at
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 is
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 an effective way for students to unwind after many hours of studying academic subjects. Through a wide range of activities, students are able to relax and
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 perform better in exams.
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, I believe that skills
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 as cooking and dressing should be included as a compulsory part of the
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 curriculum. In conclusion,
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 academic knowledge is important to pass exams, soft skills courses are not less crucial. So I believed that, life skills must
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 be included in
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 activities.
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