Differences between countries are barely evident these days. Everyone in the world is wearing the same brand and watching the same TV channels and movies. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

With the advancement of technology and change in cultural trends, all the people of the world from different continents seems to be same due to similar dressing sense.
Now a days
Suggestion
Nowadays
it's very much difficult to rule out the differences among people about their
culture
. In
this
paragraph
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will put focus on positive development regarding wearing
same kind
Suggestion
the same kind
of dresses and watching similar kind of commercials and tv shows.
Firstly
, it will make communication very much easy among the people of different regions.
For example
: If a
person
has come from India to USA and he wears traditional dress like dhoti
kurta
Suggestion
Kurta
quite
so, somewhere he feels shy and
embrassed
feeling or caused to feel uneasy and self-conscious
embarrassed
to get communicate with the
person
who wears formal dress.
Secondly
, it will make a
person
more confident by learning and going
with
Suggestion
to
flow of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
. By watching similar tv shows helps a
person
to learn the language of that area as well as it will
helps
Suggestion
help
also
to understand the
culture
and customs of other countries. Learning other's
culture
without forgetting one's own
culture
is more crucial. One should never forget his/her roots.
This
will
also
gives
Suggestion
give
a
Suggestion
an
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
for self development and grooming. Learning others
culture
also give
Suggestion
also gives
Researchers new chances to explore other cultures, to know the existence of customs and to conclude how that
culture
is different from other cultures. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to say learning other cultures in a ray of hope for betterment of humanity because somewhere it can bring
a
Suggestion
an
every
person
close without any kind discrimination.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogeneity
  • unity
  • connectivity
  • cultural diversity
  • unique traditions
  • global influences
  • loss of identity
  • individuality
  • positive impacts
  • negative impacts
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