The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
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chat
illustrates from the sample subset of 100,000 Correct your spelling
chart
people
whether they have travelled to foreign
country and for what Add an article
a foreign
reason
they have travelled in the years 1994-98 furthermore
, the second
chart shows their
destinations that they have travelled for.
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, the
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of
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the
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people
gave holidays as the reason
to go abroad while
,
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people
primarily went to western
region.
The total Add an article
the western
number
of people
that have
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went
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gone
for
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were
28,828 in the Correct subject-verb agreement
was
year
1998 which highest for the given years
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year
while
the year
1995 saw the lowest number
of people
visiting other countries which is
21,610. Change the verb form
are
Holiday
, business and Fix the agreement mistake
Holidays
visit
to friends and relatives have seen the highest Fix the agreement mistake
visits
number
in the year
1998 with numbers 20,700, 3957 and 3181 respectively. For the reason
other reason
in the year
1997
the Add a comma
,1997
number
people
gave reason
as 1054 which is highest for that category.Add an article
the reason
a reason
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