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some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundation subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides

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It is thought by some that it is no longer necessary to learn scientific
subject
 at
school
,
such
 as mathematics, while others believe that
this
 is mandatory even if it will no be used in future. In
this
 day and age,
math
 in no longer valued as before even so it is the base of all technologies. In my opinion, I believe that it is necessary to teach youngsters
math
. On one hand,
math
 is the spirit of all innovation, without
such
subject
, it would be impossible to create any of the current technologies. In order to understand complex phenomena, it in necessary to teach children the correct manners of logical thinking which is achieved via solving mathematics equations.
For instance
, if the binary numbers were not discovered, we would not be able to use computers currently.
On the other hand
,
such
subject
 may be challenging and redundant for some young student who may have more artistic or literature skills.
Thus
, some children may even end up hating
school
 because of
this
 class.
For example
, many teenagers drop off
school
 since they cannot understand
math
 and find it very hard.
Furthermore
, It is very hard to find daily applications of analytical
in contrast
 to languages that are very useful for daily communication. In conclusion, even if teaching mathematics in schools may be hard and not necessary applied later in life, I stand by the idea
that is
 should remain a principal
subject
. I believe that the benefits of
this
school
 material outweigh its drawbacks.
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