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In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, more and more inhabitants in
differents
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 countries are having chances to observe a live criminal
proceedings
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proceeding
 via
one
 of the most prevalent mass
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
media's
- TV.
Although
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Despite
 the drawback of broadcasting is present
such
 as
spoilting
resembling a sound of violent tearing as of something ripped apart or lightning splitting a tree
splitting
spitting
spouting
 the information about the offenders, the cons of that action
is
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are
 outnumbering the pros since it helps people learn loads of lessons and justice will be conceded
undoubtly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
. In terms of disadvantage, revealing criminal characteristics makes him or
herseft
reflexive form of "her"
herself
 uncomfortable.
This
 is due to the reason that the criminal afraid of being aware of in society.
For instance
, if a
lawbraker
someone who violates the law
lawbreaker
law-breaker
 who has been
releasted
release, as from one's grip
released
 after living in prison could be recognized by those watching his live court on television
,
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,
then
 no
one
 will try
having
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to have
 a conversation with him.
Therefore
, the criminal becomes a victim of isolation from the crowd and a nightmare unpleasant occurs
to
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in
 their rest of life.
On the other hand
, proving
knowlegde
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 to
public
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the public
 can be
metioned
make reference to
mentioned
maintained
 as the
first
 benefit.Looking
on
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at
for
 the criminal trails on TV helps people learn about how law systems operate.
For example
, viewers can notice the number of sides required on a typical courtroom or who is the
one
 that gives the final sentence
to
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for
 the crime.
Besides
,
livestreaming
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live streaming
 a trail of criminal is essential for proving the righteousness of
court
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courts
a court
the court
 of justice.The law executors cannot give partial intention to
one
 side
otherwise
 everything will be shown on TV to the public
.
Accept space
.
Once it happens
,
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,
there will be
aggresive attitude
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an aggressive attitude
aggressive attitude
 among the citizens who want justice be treated
equally
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equally, then
then
 result in the loss of
job
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the job
a job
 of the law administrator, In conclusion, trails about crime are
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to be shown to the public due to its tremendous benefits and only
one
 possible pros.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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