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Some people feel that with the help of technology, there is little difficulty in solving complex mathematical problems. Therefore mathematics is no longer a mandatory subject at schools and colleges. To what extent do u agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your experience or knowledge.

It is often argued that advanced
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 has made solving difficult mathematical problems very simple.
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, some people believe that mathematics should no longer be a compulsory
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 in schools and universities.
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 I agree that
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 is a useful tool, I strongly disagree that
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 should be removed as a mandatory
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 because it develops logical thinking and is necessary to verify the accuracy of machines. On the one hand, it is true that
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 has significantly reduced the effort required for calculations. Today, students and professionals use software and sophisticated calculators that can solve complex equations in seconds.
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, in many technical fields, computers can handle massive amounts of data and perform arithmetic much faster than any human.
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 means that people no longer need to spend hours doing manual long division or solving complicated integrals by hand, making the practical side of
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 more accessible.
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, I believe that mathematics remains essential because it is about more than just finding an answer. Studying
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 trains the brain to think logically and solve problems in a structured way.
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,
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 is not always perfect. If a user does not understand the basic mathematical principles, they will be unable to
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 when
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software makes an error or when data is entered incorrectly.
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, a researcher must have a strong foundation in
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 a result provided by a computer is realistic or mathematically sound. Without mandatory
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 classes, students would lose these critical analytical skills. In conclusion,
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 provides great assistance in solving mathematical problems, it does not make the
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 obsolete.
Math
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 is a fundamental skill that builds the human mind and provides the necessary knowledge to use
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 effectively.
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 at all levels of education.

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Add one more clear example to make your ideas stronger.
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Explain a little more why math is needed in both school and college.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory subject = a subject that all students must study
  • complex mathematical problems = difficult maths questions
  • logical thinking = clear and step by step thinking
  • problem-solving skills = the ability to find answers to problems
  • rely on technology = depend too much on machines or software
  • basic numeracy = simple number skills
  • real-life application = use in daily life
  • check the accuracy = see if something is correct
  • human judgment = thinking and deciding by people
  • independent thinking = thinking by yourself
  • practical skills = useful skills for work and life
  • data analysis = studying information and numbers
  • financial planning = planning how to use money
  • a useful tool = something that helps but does not replace people
  • play a key role = be very important
  • make informed decisions = make good decisions after thinking
  • foundational knowledge = basic understanding
  • keep up with modern life = stay ready for today’s world
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