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Some people believe that the restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals deem that reconstruction of the long-standing architecture is pricey,
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, we have to destroy them and install innovative models as a replacement. I strongly believe that we should deconstruct unnecessary structures and at the same time maintain historic monuments. There are two underlying reasons for ruining some archaic constructions. The
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 justification for
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 rationale could be aged facilities, like pipes, as well as the technology used for their building, and deficiency of authentic materials; because scarcity of thermal insulation inside of the building undeniably leads to excessive energy consumption and persistent renovation of conveniences. To illustrate
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, in developing countries, like mine, our government does not have enough budget funds, so
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 houses cause a variety of problems.
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, they should be destroyed in order to accumulate money and avoid accidents.
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, there are several pros for spending on fixing some of
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 objects. As long as they could be objects of heritage, it is better for local authorities to renovate them and attract tourists to earn money and make them financially independent. In the long-term perspective, its function is to preserve the memory of historical events.
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, ancient buildings in Rome millions of visitors every year, contributing to the local budget. In conclusion, if we no longer need some old buildings in terms of heritage, we can easily demolish them, but some worn-out kinds of them should remain and be actively used.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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