IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #world
Language is a bond of trust, culture, heritage and diversification. Multiple dialect comes to an end in each calendar year. Majorly, society believes that, if we have comparatively fewer
languages
 than before, survival will be much more breathable.
However
, in my view, I completely disagree with the statement. In order to support,
this
 point of view, it's considered to be multi-linguistic and is a blessing to society and fosters cultural richness.
Moreover
, it
also
 makes the communication more effective.
Firstly
, when we talk about the diversity of native
languages
: it is associated with the country, society, people, origin, religion, caste and much more. So, it is a benediction from people who are preserving them. One of the best examples - is India, which is noted for its vast cultural diversity, traditions, religions and
languages
. More than, 700 different dialects are spoken. And, 22 among them have been considered official ones. It is most likely, that your self-identity is the representation of your native language.
Furthermore
, if you are a polyglot, there is the highest probability that you are a great communicator, connector and comprehender. And,
also
 develops connections and relations quite quickly.
For instance
, an individual, who is a salesman and knows more than one language, gives an extra edge in comparison to other people. And, most likely, the sales of the salesperson will go up, when he pitches the sales in a different dialect. Often, in marketing, to build up trust and warmth
while
 having a conversation with the customer. The mother tongue plays a vital role.
To sum up
, the ground reality is
due to
 evolution and globalization, English practice has been upsurged but, still, there is a strong connection when it comes to the mother tongue.
Hence
, is extremely vital to protect your vernacular
languages
 from getting fade away.
Submitted by dewansurbhee7 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
A clear opinion was presented but more consistent development of ideas would improve the task achievement score. Aim to fully answer the question with a well-structured argument and a clear position throughout.
coherence cohesion
Consider using more logical connectors and cohesive devices to indicate the relationship between ideas more clearly. Paragraphing needs to be logical and help the reader follow the argument without effort.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
What to do next:
Look at other essays: