The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
The chart illustrates the modification in the way British people travel by comparing the average distance a person transport by different modes of carriers between the
year
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1985 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
cars were the British’s primary mode of transportation,
on the other hand
,
taxi
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was the least means preferred by English travellers. As we can see in the table that English people transport nearly 6500
miles
in the year 2000, which was an upward trend with almost 1,750
miles
higher, in comparison with
4,740
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miles
British citizens travelled in 1985. We can make a comparison among all vehicles, cars were the most popular means as almost 3,200
miles
travelled out of 4,740 ones and showed a similar trend in the
next
15 years with an increase
in
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over 1,600
miles
per person.
It is clear that
local buses were the most favoured mode of travel in 1985 in comparison with train and bicycle use
,
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but
then
showed a considerable decrease after a fifteen-year interval
while
train and the other means rose sharply. Meanwhile, the average distance British went on foot was significant, but went down slightly from 255 to under 240 in 2000. Among all the figures listed in the table,
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the taxi
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taxi
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taxis
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had the lowest distance travelled with just 13
miles
in 1985,
then
showed an ignorable increase to 42
miles
per English person.

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