The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events.
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The table illustrates four reasons why adults in the UK have attended
arts
events
over the past twenty
years
. The major reason over the whole twenty-year period was a desire to see a specific performer or artist;
while
the least important reason was attending
arts
events
for work-related reasons. The
percentage
of
people
who attended
events
out of a desire to see a particular performer has remained relatively stable throughout the twenty-year period; varying from 58% twenty
years
ago to 56%
today
.
On the other hand
, the
percentage
of
people
accompanying children has shown a significant increase, from 9% 20
years
ago to just under a quarter
today
. As far as those who attended
arts
events
because of special occasions or celebrations are concerned, the
percentage
fell slightly from 27% 20
years
ago to 20% a decade ago, dropping dramatically to 9%
today
. There has been a slight increase in the
percentage
of
people
attending
arts
events
for work or business, from 6% 20
years
ago to just over 10%
today
.
Overall
, there has been a rise in
people
attending
events
in order to accompany children and for work-related reasons,
while
fewer
people
choose to attend an
arts
event as a form of celebration.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words arts, events, years, percentage, people, today with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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