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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, opinions have been divided as to whether government should allocate funds for public libraries or replace these by machinery applicants. From my perspective, library should never be disregarded by our society. There is little room for doubt that public libraries provide students with ideal places to study. Since the environment here is quiet and tranquil, pupils can be more concentrated on their work.
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 to
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, learners may recognize that others are working really hard,
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 create motivation for them in studying. While providing that they use
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computers
a computer
the computer
 for their investigation, they may get distracted by either messages or social media A recent research in Vietnam has shown that students have a tendency to accomplish their tasks quicker and better while learning in libraries.
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, doing analysis in libraries is more efficient, in comparison with doing via automation devices. It is evident that libraries
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 data on the internet is endless, most of it has not been confirmed,
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 these knowledge sometimes is untrustworthy. Whereas books in libraries are usually recommended by professors with expertise, these books can be more reliable. Another fact to take into account is that here there are librarians, learners can consult them to find appropriate genres of books they need. In a recent survey in Korea, students who do analysis in libraries tend to perform better in presentation than those making use of
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automated
 devices due to their lexical knowledge founded in libraries’ books. Thereby, computers can not replace libraries even they serve the same facilities. In conclusion, even the proliferation of machinery appears significant, public libraries cannot be deciphered or replaced by because of their unique features and benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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