Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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My purpose for writing to you is to request for a chance to be enrolled as a
computer
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science student in
this
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high-quality
university
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. On the
first
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day of primary
school
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, my father came home after work with a
computer
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and I was very happy, because I could play games and watch videos with it. I never gave up my relationship with my
computer
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since that day and have been interested in the
computer
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for a long
time
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. In the
first
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year
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of high
school
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, they asked what
profession we
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profession, we
will want to do in the
future
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, I thought for a long
time
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and decided on
software
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engineering because I was able to handle every job with the
computer
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and I was not bored when I was at the
computer
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. Sometimes I was editing photos of my friends and myself thanks to photo editing applications, sometimes I
have tried
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try
to make small games. Since I love spending
time
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on things I love and my hobbies, I attended the developing club of the
school
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in the
second
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year
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of high
school
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, and in the
last
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year
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of high
school
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, I started the
software
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course
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to improve myself and go to
university
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ready, and I am waiting for the day I will get a certificate.
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software
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, I took a piano and guitar
course
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in my middle
school
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years, again in middle
school
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, I was
in
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on
the table tennis and football team of the
school
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, and
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I was playing football in an amateur club. I loved sports and music a lot, but in the
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future I
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future, I
decided to build my career
on
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in
computing
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as application development, website design and robotics because the
software
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was broader and much more interesting to me. I made online sales
last
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year
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and earned some money to have experience. In
this
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way, I realized that money was not earned easily and that I needed to improve myself professionally. I learned to make a website from the internet and the
course
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I went and I made two websites for my mother’s company. I loved spending
time
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with the
computer
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and wanted to go
further
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. In the final
year
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of high
school
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, I decided to move from my country to the United States for both a better education and a successful career. I convinced my family and took various exams. The place where I decided to settle was New Jersey, one of the most important states of America. It was one of the most glamorous states, both in terms of
future
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job opportunities and the quality of universities. I immediately started researching schools in new jersey and started collecting information about Montclair State
University
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, which is the
school
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that attracts me the most, its distance to campus, its nature, and quality of education. Sports activities and
computer
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science were better than I expected. After my researches, Montclair State
University
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ranked
first
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for me. To be
with
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in
a friendly environment of educated people and to graduate from a good
university
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in the
future
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and work in a good job was all I wanted. Unlike my peers, the most crucial thing for me is improving myself in several subjects, and hobbies,
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, I’m trying to find new hobbies and interests as much as possible. Sports and music take a big place in my life and I am thinking of advancing them alongside the
software
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. In order to fully understand the courses taught at the
university
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, I try to improve my English and learn the term as much as possible, and I use various applications for
this
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and I prefer watching TV series, movies, videos etc. In English over Turkish. In my opinion, I’m an ambitious person who loves pursuing his passions. I believe that I will be able to add a lot to myself and become a well-equipped
software
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developer
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development
by making use of Montclair State
University
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's facilities on campus, high level
computer
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labs and rich
course
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contents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Preservation
  • Exclusionary
  • Revenue
  • Artifact
  • Maintenance
  • Engagement
  • Admission fee
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Sustainable funding
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