Inspite of advancement made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In recent years, it has been observed that technology is progressing so fast, many people believe that it has positively affected all domains
such
as agriculture.
However
, even though there is a significant enhancement is
food
production, undoubtedly hanger still exists around the world. In my opinion, I believe that
this
may be due the government decision regarding the agricultural goods and few practices could be adapted in relation to
this
problem. On one hand, given that we live in an age where the agriculture process seems to be no is longer completely manually it seem logical to get behind the idea that
this
will enhance
food
production, and so nutrition should be available for the public everywhere.
Hence
, automating
such
domain is expensive. In order to cover
such
expenses, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
increase
food
prices.
Thus many
Accept comma addition
Thus, many
men and women are suffering from hunger as they can't afford to buy
food
. On the other had,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do believe that individual's role in handling
such
issue is as important as the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
role. From the individual side, people can donate small amounts of money to NOG organisation
such
as UNICEF, it doesn't take more that a phone click to do so. From the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
side, there should be an increase of number of shelters in cities and reduction in basic nutrient or maybe a supply point for needy people. In conclusion, it is pivotal to
understang
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
that advancement
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
dosent incluse
Suggestion
don't include
doesn't incluse
doesn't include
dosent include
poor people. I
similary
in like or similar manner
similarly
think it is the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
and the
people
Suggestion
person's
peoples'
person
peoples
duty to find
solution
Suggestion
a solution
solutions
for global hunger.

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