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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people less socially interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many people think that we become less active and less sociable with the introduction of the new
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 as smart phones, than before.
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, others believe that people have more social opportunities as we can be networked with people all over the world by using the internet. I agree with the latter opinion and
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 essay will discuss how
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 modern
technology
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 has affected our social lives.
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 with, it is true that people have less direct contact with others as we can communicate with them on the Internet.
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, we used to buy daily necessities at nearby shops and talk to shop assistants or
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
. Whereas, we can now order almost all products online and can ask to deliver them to home.
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, the way of communication
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 of visiting customers or companies, we can communicate with them via email or the online application,
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 as Skype.
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, there is no doubt that we can be connected with people in the world anytime and anywhere due to the advanced
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, and smart phones would be the most common communication device which we use every day. As a matter of fact, we can make friends who live in a different country throughout social media. We can
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 talk with a family or friends even if we live in different countries. In conclusion, I believe that
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 modern invention has connected people world- wide.
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 we may have less chance to meet with others on the daily activities
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 as shopping, or visiting them for business, we can now talk to people whom we could not meet with before. Rather than pointing out the drawbacks which the
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 has caused, we should make the most of it.
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