Some people believe children should get homework everyday, while others think they should not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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it is well said that children's are the future of the nation and at some point it is true.
Childrens
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Children's
Children
soft mind is indicated that they need more attention and less
pressure which
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pressure, which
slightly bad for their nurturing growth.I totally agreed with the statement that
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school
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the school
must give homework to the
school
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children's but in minimum amount and it can be described in upcoming paragraph.
Firstly
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homework is very essential for the students to maintain their flow in their studies and every
school
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or organization want that the children who studying in their institution will achieve higher from their normal expectations.
by
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By
doing regular
homework students
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homework, students
have a fear about their
daliy
every day; without missing a day
daily
studies and being punished by the teachers if work is not completed.But at the same time if more burden is put on
child's mind
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the child's mind
a child's mind
than
there
of them or themselves
their
brain become full of stress and
tension
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tension, although
although
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beside studies amusement is
also
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necessary for the child growth and
healthy life style
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyle
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
it
is totally depend
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totally depends
on
school
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authority to restrict about
given
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giving
huge work to students at home. To conclude
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,
it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
of teachers and
also
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parents to enhance the study pressure on their child so that they live happy life without any worry.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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