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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is usually said that when an unfavourable
situation
 occurs, the best strategy would be to accept the
situation
 and move on.
However
, it is
also
 argued that
instead
 of accepting
such
 circumstances, one must give an effort to
imrpove
to make better
improve
 in
such
 situations. In my opinion, I would believe that a person must fight harder and improve themselves rather than accepting a bad
situation
 and do nothing.
This
 essay will discuss both these aspects in coming into
this
 conclusion.
Firstly
, it can be easily
point
Suggestion
pointed
 out that without trying for improvement, a person will always stagnate and always face the same problems throughout their entire life.
For example
, suppose if a person is doing a job which he doesn't like and not getting paid well, he
wont
will not
won't
 be able to get away with it as long as he is not trying to improve himself by giving extra effort to find a job that he loves or provide a better pay.
Secondly
, it is evident that only people who have tried to improve themselves, have managed to overcome these problems and able to lead a successful life. Many examples of most popular rich people had past lives which had difficult situations.
However
, one can argue that there may be adverse situations which are out of their control.
where
Suggestion
Where
such
 scenario
occures
come to pass
occurs
, there is no point of trying other than accept the
situation
.
For instance
, if a company gets bankrupt, all the employees in that company will
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their jobs despite their efforts. Even though they still do have other career options available. In conclusion, it can be seen that even though when there is a bad
situation
, people must try to improve in
such
 situations to live better rather that accept and have a miserable life.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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