An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantage and disadvantage for both individuals and companies to shopping online.

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People have different perspective regarding online shopping. Because of increasing demand of c

onsumers there

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consumers, there

are a lot of profitable companies nowadays.

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some buyers and

business

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enjoying the benefits of shopping online, others facing negative experiences.

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one

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of t

he good

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the best

eason

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reasons

of buying online is convenient of costumers. All things that you possibly needed was posted in front of your laptop or mobile phones. People don’t need to be s

tress

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stressed

in facing crowds in shopping mall or traffic in order to buy something. It takes only f

ew hours

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a few hours

to browse in i

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the internet

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purchase order. After that it c

onveniently deliver

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conveniently delivers

is conveniently delivered

to you without hassle. And for some companies

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beneficial.

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, they don’t need a big capital to start

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usiness

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a business

and manpower to help them. Since i

it is

it's

online, they just need to upload the picture of their product for marketing. L

ess worker

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Less work

and more convenient.

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, your place is far from s

hopping center,

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the shopping centre

shopping centre

shopping centres

less worry because i

it is

it's

easy for you to shop and less costly. And for the companies its accessible for them to showcase their product not only limited to

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lace but

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place, but

even to many places that they can t

hru

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social media.

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, due to growing online consumers most of the companies gained a good profit on their

business

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. But

one

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of the negative impact, they are not an environmental friendly. According to l

atest research

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the latest research

about online shopping, they’re using more plastic bags for packaging compare to s

hopping

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the shopping

enter

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

that promoting eco-friendly bags to use

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of plastic.

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, if you will buy three products online they will pack it separately, whereas in s

hop

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the shop

these can be put together in

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bag. Another possible problem is, buyers tend to be more impulsive. Because of accessibility of online shopping the costumer buy more products than usual.

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will result of i

ncreasing number

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an increasing number

the increasing number

of people having a

ddiction

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an addiction

of buying things even its not necessary. In conclusion, online

business

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both beneficial to consumer and companies.

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, there are

also

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consequences to be aware of.

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