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You have recently moved to a new apartment. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved describe your new apartment invite him/her to pay a visit

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Hope you are doing well, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that , I moved to a new apartment in Borivali
last
 month.
To begin
 with , Actually ,I moved to a new house because as you know I got a new job opportunity in a reputed organization and my new
society
 is near to my
office
.
Moreover
, it was difficult for me to travel from my previous apartment to the new
office
 during
office
 hours because there was a heavy traffic jam on the road.
As a result
 ,I always reached the
office
 late.
For
this
 reason, I decided to change my house.
Secondly
 , My new
society
 is a modern
society
 . It has all the basic amenities
such
 as a swimming pool ,supermarket , kids play zone and gym. My new apartment has two bedrooms, a living room and a kitchen.
In addition
, there is lush greenery inside the
society
. I would like to invite you to visit my home at the weekend , we haven't met for so long so I really want to meet you. Please plan your visit and let me know. Waiting for your reply.
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greeting and closing
Include a clear greeting at the beginning and a proper closing at the end of your letter to structure it appropriately.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clarity and effective organization of information.
complete response
Aim to fully address all three bullet points given in the task prompt to ensure a complete response.
suitable writing tone
Use a tone that is consistent and appropriate for writing to a friend.
logical structure
Organize your letter into clear logical paragraphs, using transitional phrases to connect ideas and guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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