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In many counties, it is believed that clean home is where God likes to live. Some people think that it is necessary to keep your surrounding tidy. In addition, office culture also needs to be keeping office organized and an item to appropriate location. Essay is going to narrate importance of it and conclude with opinion.

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To begin
 with, neat house does not allow harmful bacteria and keeps
people
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peoples'
person's
peoples
 health. Dust and debris
are tend
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tend
 to attract germs. It could become
place
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places
 to grow preys. If there are any unused vegetables
laying
the deliberate act of deviating from the truth
lying
 around, it can attract bees and
ants which
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ants, which
 could grow into
major station
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a major station
major stations
 of bacteria.
In addition
, tidy place gives positive vibes and psychological effect. People tend to visit places where they find positive environment.
Recent survey
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Recent surveys
A recent survey
 in
USA
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the USA
, work force like their clean office and keeps them happy.
Moreover
, organized place helps to find anything easily. Many people give preferences to keep their desk neat.
Firstly
, by organizing cabinet, one already knows where to look for which saves time and energy.
Lot
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A lot
 of logistics companies maintain
online record
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an online record
 of goods where simple lookup gives accurate location of
product
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the product
. So,
business
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the business
 saves money and valuable efforts of their employees.
Secondly
, correct location of important documents and medicines are handy in
emergency situation
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emergency situations
an emergency situation
. In 2001, Gujarat, a state of India had a dangerous earthquake. We did not have a time to gather any belonging. In that situation, my grandfather’s habit helps us to find passport and travel documents easily. In my opinion, people should be organized wherever they work or live. In the end, it is going to simplify their life.

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