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A lot of social problems can be related to teenagers these days. Some feel that this is because parents are not able to spend enough time to take care of their teenage child. Do you agree or disagree?

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In contemporary society, top priority has been given to youth as its importance in individual growth and social development. There is a controversial discussion among people that many social problems committed by teenagers are mostly blamed
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for
on
 parents’
inadequant
lacking the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
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From
 my perspective, I strongly disagree with it, and I reckon social media and
school
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 have more essential impacts on
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 phenomenon.
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 with, contents published on social media are not likely all optimistic for adolescents. It is commonly known that internet users have the right to speak
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freely
 online to express their
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concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
 opinions. Since
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 case, questionable contents
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 as violence and pornography are easily imitated by teenagers due to
immature value system
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the immature value system
. With that being said, parents are unlikely to prohibit teenagers’ usage of social media in order to prevent imitation.
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,
school
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 plays an undeniable role in youths’ social problems as most of them spend a large amount of time in
school
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 during week days. Without a doubt, teachers in
school
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 should not only impart textbook knowledge, but
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 teach correct behaviours.
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, young students have
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a higher change
higher changes
 to learn poor behaviours
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 as bully during
school
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 if teachers do not correct them immediately. Parents, in
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 case, are unaware of nothing if no one acknowledge them. To sum up, I would
certainly object the
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certainly object to the
 concept that parents are the main reason for teenagers’ delinquency. As far as I am concerned, social media and schools should be more responsible for
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 phenomenon due to
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the negative impacts
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of
 social media and late behaviour correction from schools.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Estrangement
  • Adolescence
  • Boundary-setting
  • Parental neglect
  • Supervision
  • Peer pressure
  • Quality time
  • Intergenerational gap
  • Cyberbullying
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Youth delinquency
  • Mentorship
  • Family dynamics
  • Workaholism
  • Helicopter parenting
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