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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table provides information about the
visitors
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visited
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who visited
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 the Ashdom Museum before and after its refurbishment
while
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pie
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the pie
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 charts illustrate the review of
a
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apply
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visitor's
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visitors
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 in terms of satisfaction.
Overall
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, it can be noted that there was a significant increase in the number of
visitors
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 after decoration.
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Results
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Result
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The result
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 of
surveys
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the surveys
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 showed the level of satisfaction among
visitors
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 rose tremendously.
According to
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 the table, before
renovated
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renovation
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 74,000 people went to the Museum but after redecorating it showed an upward trend which increased
around
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to around
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 18,000
peoples
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people
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 and reached 92,000. Looking at the pie charts in more detail, there was a noticeable rise in the proportion of very satisfied from 15% to 35% more than double.
One
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 the other hand, the percentage of satisfied tourists climbed by 10%, reaching 40%. Before the renovation, 40% of respondents respond that they were dissatisfied with the museum, but
this
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 percentage went down to only 15% after refurbishment.
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, the number of very dissatisfied
visitors
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also
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 halved from 10% to 5%.
Lastly
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, the category of no response remained the same over two periods.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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