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genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. it should be limited. to what extend do you agree?

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One of the hotly debated issues is scientific research in the field of genetics. There is an opinion that achievements in
this
 area can be significantly harmful to people in the future and should not
unlimitedly
 be continued. I partially agree with
this
, but I must recognize the positive side of progress in the field of genetic engineering. On the one hand, genetic engineering can lead to new types of terminal illnesses. Since scientists discovered DNA in the mid-20th century, the risk of new types of diseases has been rapidly
increased
Suggestion
increasing
.
For instance
, as is known due to gain a lot of volume of cobweb, which is necessary for nanotechnology, scientists have linked the DNA of spider with the DNA of goat. It gives the chance to get enough volume of cobweb from the goat’s milk.
However
,
no one
Accept comma addition
no, one
 cannot
guaranty
a written assurance that some product or service will be provided or will meet certain specifications
guarantee
 that spider's diseases will not transfer to human beings in
this
 way.
Thus
, the opinion that
this
 kind of dangerous trend must be limited is well-founded.
On the other hand
, achievements in genetic engineering contribute to decreasing hunger in a world. Crossing different crop genes lead to an increase in their resistant and harvest.
For example
, cold and decay-resistant of some type of potato have been rising due to crossing with the DNA of potato beetle.
Moreover
, scientists allege that
such
 a kind of achievement is absolutely safe for human beings.
Therefore
, continuing experiments in
this
 area might be more beneficial in the future. In conclusion, though I agree that the results of these experiments might be a course of irreversible consequences
such
 as unknown types of diseases, these achievements
also
 might bring unlimited benefits for humanity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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