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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree.

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I Strongly agree with
this
 statement. Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities and
this
 essay will explore the extent to which I agree with
this
 view. I will
furthermore
 explain three main views pointing to companies being the most capable to provide facilities as well as the benefit of
such
 facilities for employees.
Firstly
, since companies undoubtedly have the necessary amount of revenue required to provide
such
 facilities they are the most capable to do so.
In addition
, they are well suited to sustain
such
 facilities
as a result
 of their experience obtained from operating a company.
This
 means it is more likely a community can benefit from a facility run by a company as opposed to an individual.
For instance
, a company like 'fitness
first
' would be in more of a capable position to provide the relevant facilities to communities than an average person because of the reasons given.
Furthermore
, many companies retain workers to perform tasks that may be stressful or mundane.
Although
 the companies are not obligated to provide facilities for communities, I adamantly believe that them doing so would help in the physical and social health of the people in the community.
Such
 an example is those that are employed in the computer programming sector. In conclusion, companies being the most well equipped, are the most capable to provide facilities to communities in order to promote the physical and social well being and I firmly agree that because of the reasons that I have stated that companies should indeed provide sports and social facilities.
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