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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

#demand #food #measures #community
Global
needs
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need
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 for
food
 is getting more
due to
 the burgeoning population and
climate
change
. In order to solve the mentioned issue, it is need to invent new organic
foods
 which can be used in
little
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small
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 amounts.
This
 essay will discuss
causes
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the causes
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 and solutions of the problem
further
. One of the reasons for increasing
food
 demand is
growing
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the growing
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 population.
Food
 is needed for
human’s
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human
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 survival and main part of people’s
life
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lives
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. Because of the problem, some regions of the third world are already suffering from scarcity of
food
 supplies.
In addition
,
detrimental
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the detrimental
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effect
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effects
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 of
the
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climate
change
 can be
also
 considered as another underlying cause
for
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of
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 the problem.
Rise
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 in the temperature leads to the death of millions of animals and it is presumed that
majority
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the majority
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 of plants will sink under the water.
That is
 why people were informed that Global Warming is coming soon, most people are getting ready by preserving
food
 for
the
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future survival.In the
fast developing
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fast-developing
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 world,
by
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with
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 the
advents
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advances
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of
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in
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 technology and science, now, it is possible to invent new
foods
 to prevent the insufficiency of
food
 resources. Nanotechnology,
for example
, in recent years has evolved the ideas of accumulation of
food
 by using only
little
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a small
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 amount of
any
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apply
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grain. So, it is proposed
to
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that
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international communities
to
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apply
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take measurements right now and mostly
concentrated
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concentrate
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 on the regions where
food
 deficiency
became
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has become
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the
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a
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 burden to people’s
life
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lives
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. As
it was
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mentioned before
that
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climate
change
 is one
the
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of the
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 contributing factors
for
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to
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 the issue,
whole
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the whole
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 world should consider
the
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ways of preventing humanity from upcoming
threat
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threats
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 to the Earth.
For instance
, reducing the usage of engine cars and imposing the laws of using only organic
foods
.
To sum up
, as
growing
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a growing
the growing
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number of
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population and alternation in
climate
leads
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lead
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 to the insufficiency of
foods
, it is highly needed to take actions like
invention
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the invention
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 of new organic
foods
 and
prevention
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the prevention
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 of
climate
change
.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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