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Some people think that there will be decrease in international travel in future.Do you think the less amount of international travel is a positive or negative development?

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Increasing global tourism has become common in
this
 contemporary world. While some individuals argue that it will decline in the foreseeable future.I, personally, believe that less foreign tourists mean lower growth rate of the economy of any nation and I think
this
 is a negative development.
To begin
 with, international trip is a billion dollar industry nowadays.Since more and more people are looking forward to tour abroad due to several reasons varying from religious to educational ones,
thus
 numerous tourists mean extensive sources of income for the people of the host nations.
Consequently
, it will boost the country's economy and
hence
, enhances the development of the nation.
For instance
, in India, there are many tourist spots,
such
 as Taj Mahal in Agra, one of the most popular attractions for the visitors from all over the world, where foreigners visit every year and spend money on food, clothes and hotels during their stay.
This
 way, if global tourism will decline,
then
 the progress of the country will be adversely affected
Furthermore
, it helps in spreading the culture of the distinct countries in different parts of the world.
In other words
, it promotes cultural diversity and promotes the feeling of brotherhood among the masses.Eventually, it will widen the horizons of the people by making them familiar with each other customs, festivals, languages and even garments.
For instance
, at present Indian culture is widening its roots in various European countries as well. In short
,
Accept space
,
lesser individuals who travel abroad means fewer chances of multicultural spread. To conclude, if fewer person will travel to abroad,
then
 there will be extremely less opportunities available for economic progress and cultural exchange.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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