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in the past when students did a university degree,they tended to study in their own counytry. Nowadays,they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the aow dvantages and disadvantages of this development

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university degree
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A university degree
University degree
 is very important for any individual for getting a good job.Now the students have more opportunities to do their higher studies abroad than the past.
This
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 development has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the main
advantage
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advantages
 is that the students get a chance to interact with other students who are from different countries and it helps them to learn about new cultures as well as the students get exposed to new
mehods
a way of doing something, especially a systematic way; implies an orderly logical arrangement (usually in steps)
methods
 of teaching and
stdying
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
.Studying in a foreign
country
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 enables a student to
becpme
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
 self dependent as they have to do everything themselves like cooking
,
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,
finding a job etc.
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 development has disadvantages as well. If we are studying
abroad we
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abroad, we
 should look after
ourselves but
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ourselves, but
 if we are studying in our own
country
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 we get support from family and friends and can concentrate well in our academics.Another disadvantage is that many students going abroad for their higher studies make it as their home
country
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.After the completion of their
studies they
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studies, they
 find a job
their
in or at that place
there
 and prefer to settle down in that
country
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 itself and
donot
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do not
 come back to their homeland.
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Also many
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Also, many
 students may find it difficult to adapt to the new culture.
studying in any
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In studying any
Studying in any
 foreign
country
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 has more advantages than disadvantages.Doing higher studies abroad makes a person more confident
,
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,
self dependent and
also
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 more
knowledeable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 about different cultures which helps them to adapt to new environment very
easi;y
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
 and quickly.
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