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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that wildlife is an essential part of our ecosystem on which we are all dependent and play a vital part in our lives. While some people believe that it needs better protection for funding and prior attention of government, but I completely disagree because there is another major problem in our environment which are knocking our door for attention.
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, Global warming is one of the most important issues which need immediate attention from the central governments of all the countries. Climate change is occurring
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 affecting human and animal life throughout the earth.
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, glaciers in Antarctica have been started melting at a fast pace for which we human and our lifestyle are responsible for that. Glaciers are the main source of our drinking water and we rely on them to fulfil our daily and future needs for water. Government needs to make a plan to save the glaciers without worrying about the money involved in
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 task. Another pollution, which is creating more trouble than saving
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 is water pollutions. Various kinds of chemical and oil industries disposing their hazardous waste directly into the rivers which we will use for drinking. If
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 continues to happen, we will soon begin to have very serious or deadly medical conditions. Government needs to stop
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 as soon as possible. They should provide a solution to these companies to dispose their waste at a dump site which is far from the cities. They should invest in recycling or decomposing plants which will take care of these wastes and make the cities cleaner and greener. In my opinion,
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 projects are
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 important to save endangered animals and birds and unfortunately we have other major issues
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 prior to
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 to save all the mankind and animals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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