A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Construction of new buildings and restoration of old
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buildings, both
buildings both
costs money.
However
which buildings to preserve becomes that important question here. I believe that Housing and commercial buildings need to be replaced in order to support the growing
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
popuation
in cities.
However
, older buildings with cultural and heritage should be preserved. Countries like Singapore have invested heavily on building affordable multi-storey housing for all classes of the population.
This
decision was based on
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a limited land area
limited land area
of the small island city nation.
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The presence
Presence
of these affordable homes enabled significant amount of economic growth of the country. These
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housings
housing
have limited lease of 100
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years, after
years after
which they are demolished and are replaced by
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efficient newer buildings
an efficient newer building
efficient newer building
.
This
increased capacity of housing has enabled concentration of wealth in a relatively small geographic area. Newer buildings
also
have better safety records. They are less flammable and
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protect
are protected
from natural elements.
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The recent record
Recent record
of
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the incidence
incidence
and extent of destruction due to fires in the city of Delhi
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indicates
indicate
more incidences of fires in buildings in Old Delhi than the newly developed areas of New Delhi. New buildings are built with
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the latest scientific innovations
latest scientific innovations
are
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protected
protecting
building during natural
a state of extreme (usually irremediable) ruin and misfortune
disasters
diasters
as seen in Tokyo, which is prone to frequent earthquakes. In conclusion newer housing and commercial building are required to
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
accomodate
the growing population.
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However, older
However older
building with significant historical value should be preserved and renovated as it represents the cultural identity of its citizens.

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