A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Construction of new buildings and restoration of old

buildings both

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buildings, both

costs money.

However

which buildings to preserve becomes that important question here. I believe that Housing and commercial buildings need to be replaced in order to support the growing

popuation

the people who inhabit a territory or state

population

in cities.

However

, older buildings with cultural and heritage should be preserved. Countries like Singapore have invested heavily on building affordable multi-storey housing for all classes of the population.

This

decision was based on

limited land area

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a limited land area

of the small island city nation.

Presence

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The presence

of these affordable homes enabled significant amount of economic growth of the country. These

housing

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housings

have limited lease of 100

years after

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years, after

which they are demolished and are replaced by

efficient newer building

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efficient newer buildings

an efficient newer building

This

increased capacity of housing has enabled concentration of wealth in a relatively small geographic area. Newer buildings

also

have better safety records. They are less flammable and

are protected

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protect

from natural elements.

Recent record

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The recent record

incidence

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the incidence

and extent of destruction due to fires in the city of Delhi

indicate

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indicates

more incidences of fires in buildings in Old Delhi than the newly developed areas of New Delhi. New buildings are built with

latest scientific innovations

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the latest scientific innovations

are

protecting

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protected

building during natural

diasters

a state of extreme (usually irremediable) ruin and misfortune

disasters

as seen in Tokyo, which is prone to frequent earthquakes. In conclusion newer housing and commercial building are required to

accomodate

be agreeable or acceptable to

accommodate

the growing population.

However older

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However, older

building with significant historical value should be preserved and renovated as it represents the cultural identity of its citizens.

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Fully explain your ideas

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