A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Construction of new buildings and restoration of old
buildings both
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buildings, both
costs money.
However
which buildings to preserve becomes that important question here. I believe that Housing and commercial buildings need to be replaced in order to support the growing
popuation
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
in cities.
However
, older buildings with cultural and heritage should be preserved. Countries like Singapore have invested heavily on building affordable multi-storey housing for all classes of the population.
This
decision was based on
limited land area
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a limited land area
of the small island city nation.
Presence
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The presence
of these affordable homes enabled significant amount of economic growth of the country. These
housing
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housings
have limited lease of 100
years after
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years, after
which they are demolished and are replaced by
efficient newer building
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efficient newer buildings
an efficient newer building
.
This
increased capacity of housing has enabled concentration of wealth in a relatively small geographic area. Newer buildings
also
have better safety records. They are less flammable and
are protected
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protect
from natural elements.
Recent record
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The recent record
of
incidence
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the incidence
and extent of destruction due to fires in the city of Delhi
indicate
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indicates
more incidences of fires in buildings in Old Delhi than the newly developed areas of New Delhi. New buildings are built with
latest scientific innovations
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the latest scientific innovations
are
protecting
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protected
building during natural
diasters
a state of extreme (usually irremediable) ruin and misfortune
disasters
as seen in Tokyo, which is prone to frequent earthquakes. In conclusion newer housing and commercial building are required to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
the growing population.
However older
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However, older
building with significant historical value should be preserved and renovated as it represents the cultural identity of its citizens.

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