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Essay topics: Some people think that it is important for children to learn lessons outside the classroom by visiting public buildings. In what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many progressive schools today conducting programs and
study
 classes outside the school campus,
such
 as public buildings or business centre for innovative learning experience of the students. In my opinion, I believe that, it can be a good opportunity for children to learn novel ideas and skills for their practical knowledge, which are not usually available in the school environment.
To begin
 with, sometimes classroom can be a tedious and stressful and
therefore
, more practical experience would make students creative thinking and inquisitive power.
For example
, while visiting historical museum, students can get more chances to see an object as well as handle real things like coins, inscriptions, utensils of ancient times and so on.
As a result
, they can reinforce
study
Suggestion
the study
 of history and recall their information more easily.
On the other hand
, field trip to local businesses could be a delight memory and by the way, improve their knowledge regarding certain items, which they are using regularly.
For instance
, travel to a nearby cashew nut factory, that not only to have a new information, but
also
 to know the effort which they are taking place so far. Due to these, students can get inventive erudition as well as kindness.
However
, of those
study
 tours may have more fun and direct contact with the local people, which make students as recreational activities rather than a learning experience.
This
 can defeat the actual purpose of
such
 trips, and
therefore
, some parents are sceptical about these actions. To conclude, improve students' cognitive thinking through visiting or giving project works as well as lessons outside the school compound. So that
next
 generation becomes practically more experienced in the field of
study
, and
also
 their life's journey would be more interesting and creative.
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