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People fro poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get university education. some people think that the government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In order to receive offers to study at
university
, students must meet entry requirements and pay tuition fees. These conditions are universal for all
university
 applicants, which means that those from underprivileged backgrounds face more difficulties in obtaining higher education. I fully agree that the government should introduce special arrangements to enable more of these students to study at
university
. Children who live in remote areas, or whose parents cannot pay for private secondary education, typically attend schools where teachers are not as strong as those in private schools, or those in the state schools located in the city centres.
As a result
, those children achieve lower grades on average in their final school exams, and have fewer chances to be offered places at universities.
However
, their grades reflect not only their merits, but
also
 the weaknesses of the educational system, and
this
 should be taken into consideration. For that reason, universities should have lower entry requirements for
such
 young people in order to give them an equal chance.
Furthermore
, in rural areas, average household income is typically significantly lower than it is in cities.
This
 means that people from those areas can often find it hard to pay tuition fees, which are the same for everyone.
For instance
, in the UK, the average income in London is almost twice as high as in wales, yet students from small villages in Wales and those from London are all required to pay nine thousand pounds per year to study at
university
. Without any doubt, the government and universities should introduce more scholarships and discounts for student from families with low income. To conclude, I agree that the government and universities should together introduce lower entry requirements and more scholarships for students from remote areas and lower-income families in order to give them an equal chance to acquire a
university
 education.

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