Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Many People hold a

view point

a mental position from which things are viewed

viewpoint

that children are spending more

time

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watching T.V these

days but

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days, but

It can never be equivalent to the books with respect to providing knowledge. I partially agree with

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statement and I’ll be enlightening

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the same to support my point of view.

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, I believe that nowadays School curriculum are structured in

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a way that kids hardly get any free

time

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to do any other thing

then

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studying and extracurricular activities conducted in schools.

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– Many schools organize extra classes for self-

defense

(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies

defence

, Drama or Art to name

few

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a few

after regular classes.

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, when children get some free

time

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they choose to play outside with their friends rather than staying indoors and watching TV.

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this

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, since kids these days are so busy with catching up to their schedule, if they watch television in their free

time

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for

limited period it

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a limited period, it

a limited period it

limited periods it

add to their knowledge and refresh their mind as

well

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well, however

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parents should always keep an eye on them as to which channel or programs they have subscribed to. Parents or elders should always make sure that programs accessed by children are educational or entertaining in a good way.

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, nowadays there are many shows, which are especially directed

for

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children.

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- Dora the explorer, while watching

this

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show kids not only get

entertained but

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entertained, but

they

also

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learn new vocabulary and it

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also help

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also helps

has also helped

to build their geography knowledge. To recapitulate, Children has got a lot

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their plate that they barely get any leisure

time

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to watch Television and whenever they get some, Parents should always be around to make sure that they are not spending so much

time

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in front of a T.V set.

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, young generation in the present era

are

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far more well –educated and smarter than the kids in the past as the education system at present developed and enhanced so much. Needless to say, that books are the primary source of education which can never be replaced by an idiot box.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

340 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational tool
Documentaries
Passive consumption
Critical thinking
Imagination
Attention span
Literacy skills
Screen time
Parental guidance
Digital materials
Interactive learning
Multimedia resources
Cognitive development
Reading comprehension
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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

Most teenagers today own a smartphone. Provide your opinion to discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Nowadays, some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In many countries, people do not recycle waste materials, such as bottles and newspapers. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?