Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Many People hold a
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
view point
that children are spending more
time
watching T.V these
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days, but
days but
It can never be equivalent to the books with respect to providing knowledge. I partially agree with
this
statement and I’ll be enlightening
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at
on
the same to support my point of view.
Firstly
, I believe that nowadays School curriculum are structured in
such
a way that kids hardly get any free
time
to do any other thing
then
studying and extracurricular activities conducted in schools.
For example
– Many schools organize extra classes for self-
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
defense
, Drama or Art to name
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a few
few
after regular classes.
Secondly
, when children get some free
time
they choose to play outside with their friends rather than staying indoors and watching TV.
In addition
to
this
, since kids these days are so busy with catching up to their schedule, if they watch television in their free
time
for
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a limited period, it
a limited period it
limited periods it
limited period it
add to their knowledge and refresh their mind as
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well, however
well
however
parents should always keep an eye on them as to which channel or programs they have subscribed to. Parents or elders should always make sure that programs accessed by children are educational or entertaining in a good way.
Furthermore
, nowadays there are many shows, which are especially directed
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to
for
children.
For example
- Dora the explorer, while watching
this
show kids not only get
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entertained, but
entertained but
they
also
learn new vocabulary and it
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also helps
has also helped
also help
to build their geography knowledge. To recapitulate, Children has got a lot
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on
in
their plate that they barely get any leisure
time
to watch Television and whenever they get some, Parents should always be around to make sure that they are not spending so much
time
in front of a T.V set.
Also
, young generation in the present era
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is
are
far more well –educated and smarter than the kids in the past as the education system at present developed and enhanced so much. Needless to say, that books are the primary source of education which can never be replaced by an idiot box.

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