In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Recent years have witnessed tremendous developments in agricultural
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science, yet
science yet
every day people all over the
world
continue to suffer and even die from hunger. In my opinion,
this
is because innovations rarely impact the developing
world
and the best
solution
for it is to direct humanitarian funding towards these advances. The main cause of more advanced agricultural methods not reaching the people who need it the most is that the developing
world
has trouble implementing these methods. There are a number of reasons for
this
ranging from limited financial resources to poor existing infrastructure to political instability, depending on the country in question. One example of
this
would be in many African nations, where
malnourishment
has historically been highest. Countries like the Congo have seen revolution after revolution over the
last
several decades, which has effectively destabilised the entire country. The universities where students would learn about changes in agriculture are frequently shut down or destroyed. The young people who would become agricultural scientists end up drawn into the conflict as soldiers or victims. Long-term economic neglect means that the government has very limited ability to subsidise farming. These problems are present to varying degrees in countries around the
world
and offer one possible explanation for the continued prevalence of hunger. The
solution
that I believe would be most effective is directing humanitarian funds previously focused on food aid towards education and agricultural infrastructure. Food aid is a notoriously poor
solution
because it only offers an immediate
solution
and warlords often exploit it to support their continued mistreatment of their people. It hurts more than it helps.
However
, there would be better long-term effects if international organisations and governments redirected that money into helping build better farms, provide more modern equipment, and sending qualified
a person engaged in one of the learned professions
professionals
professions
to train people in need. There is a TedTalk by a young man in Kenya who built his own windmill out of old bicycle parts and by reading a book in the local library. It is large enough to power his own house and he was seeking financing for a larger one that would power irrigation channels for the entire village. If more people like him can be found or
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trained, then
trained
then
this
will have an impact that lasts for decades and is relatively impervious to the factors preventing agricultural advances from taking root in developing countries. In conclusion, developing companies face myriad problems that hinder their ability to take advantage of newer agricultural models and we should direct more funding to helping these countries learn more about new farming methods.
This
is likely to be an important issue in the
world
as the gap between rich and poor, develop and undeveloped widens while technological progress continues its indifferent march forward.

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