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Band 4.5

You and your friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were extremely disssatisfied with the experience. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter:  Explain the reason for the celebration  Give details of your visit to the restaurant  Say what you would like the restaurant to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to offer a suggestion regarding a meal at a restaurant. I am dissatisfied with the experience. I have noticed that when I have celebrated my birthday party at your restaurant. The reason for
celebration
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the celebration
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 is that it is my thirty birthday party. So, it is necessary to celebrate
all
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with all
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 my friends on that day. We were on
the Monday evening
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a Monday evening
Monday evening
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 at your place on
16th
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the 16th
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 of October.
Food
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The food
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 was not good on that day, and
also
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 the arrangement was not satisfactory.
This
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 situation could be improved if you will hire more staff at your restaurant, so that
arragement
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arrangement
 will be better. One possible solution would be to change the current chef. It is believed that
such
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 an initiative would benefit both customers and
owner
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owners
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. I would appreciate it if you
culd
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could
 consider
this
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 suggestion and take appropriate steps to address the issue. Thank you for your attention. I look forward to seeing improvements in the near future. Yours faithfully, Adam.

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task achievement
Make sure to explain your feelings more clearly about the meal and service.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs that focus on one main idea each.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling mistakes, like 'culd' instead of 'could.'
suitable writing tone
You used a polite tone throughout the letter, which is good.
complete response
You clearly stated the reason for your visit, which helps the reader understand your situation.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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