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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others thinks that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Many persons strongly believe that, to measure the intellect of a
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a success
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, some people feel that there are various other modes to check the brilliance of a human. I firmly believe that,
intelligence
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 could be observed through the reaction of a somebody, with their popularity among people and many other ways.
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, in the world, many people are relishing the height of ac
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achievement, not
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, but because of their parent’s hard work.
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, everyone knows Mukesh Ambani, because of his smart move to do the business.
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 he earned everything because of his own hard work, but what about his other family members, they got prosperity because of his
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. It depicts, successful people are not always intelligent and hard working.
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, every day is a new day, people are learning from every moment. The individual, who is handling a worse situation with their own
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, gets famous and starts earning through his popularity among society. People are equally well famous because of their controversies and getting more work, but it does not mean they are intelligent,
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, Shehnaz Gill, she participated in Big Boss 13, because of her controversial behaviour, she is getting huge accomplishment and money not because of her
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. In conclusion, people who are intelligent, it does not mean they are successful as people who are dumb could be richer. I will say intelligent people are able to win the heart of people and can impress others; they could be judged through their popularity, nature, body language not only from their bank accounts.
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