The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Given
chart bar
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chart, bar
show the information regarding to
trip
made by children aged 5-12 in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of
transport
. In year 1990 mostly
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
by walking, almost more than 12
millions
Suggestion
million
trips
has been arranged
Suggestion
have been arranged
, But in 2010
this
number suddenly declined to 6 millions
trip
. 1990 was
year
Suggestion
the year
a year
in which children
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
less
throw
Suggestion
throws
car according
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car, according
to given figures in chart little more than 4
millions
Suggestion
million
trip
ware arranged, But in 2010 children mostly
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
from
Suggestion
by
car almost more than 10
millions
Suggestion
million
trips were arranged. Bus were
second
choice in 1990 after walking which was almost more than 6 million,
however with
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however, with
the passage of time it has been declined to 5
millions
Suggestion
million
. In 1990 after bus, cycling were
choice
Suggestion
the choice
of most of the children to perform
trip
,
however in
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however, in
2010 it has been reached to 2
millions
Suggestion
million
. Least for
transport
modes in 1990 were walking and bus, Almost less than 6
millions
Suggestion
million
children were using it has a
transport
mode, But in 2010 children
use less
having no beneficial use or incapable of functioning usefully
useless
this
mode of
transport
as well, which has been reached to more than 2 millions.

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