The role of prisons should be to punish criminals who have committed serious crimes. Training courses and education offered to prisoners are a waste of taxpayers' money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Given

chart bar

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chart, bar

show the information regarding to

trip

made by children aged 5-12 in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of

transport

. In year 1990 mostly

traveled

traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term

travelled

by walking, almost more than 12

millions

Suggestion

million

trips

has been arranged

Suggestion

have been arranged

, But in 2010

this

number suddenly declined to 6 millions

trip

. 1990 was

year

Suggestion

the year

a year

in which children

traveled

traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term

travelled

less

throw

Suggestion

throws

car according

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car, according

to given figures in chart little more than 4

millions

Suggestion

million

trip

ware arranged, But in 2010 children mostly

traveled

traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term

travelled

from

Suggestion

car almost more than 10

millions

Suggestion

million

trips were arranged. Bus were

second

choice in 1990 after walking which was almost more than 6 million,

however with

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however, with

the passage of time it has been declined to 5

millions

Suggestion

million

. In 1990 after bus, cycling were

choice

Suggestion

the choice

of most of the children to perform

trip

however in

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however, in

2010 it has been reached to 2

millions

Suggestion

million

. Least for

transport

modes in 1990 were walking and bus, Almost less than 6

millions

Suggestion

million

children were using it has a

transport

mode, But in 2010 children

use less

having no beneficial use or incapable of functioning usefully

useless

this

mode of

transport

as well, which has been reached to more than 2 millions.

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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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196 words

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