One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

"The
life
expentancy
an expectation
expectancy
is growing due to the advantages of medicine,
nowdays
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now days
that is
one of the benefits for the humanity. From my point of view I recognize the importance of the investigation
on
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in
this
field because of benefits and increase the quality
life
of people around all the
world regardless
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world, regardless
their social or economic level to give the chance to live more years and be more productive
futhermore
in addition
furthermore
giving the people the possibility to be healthier and enjoyable until their
last
days of
life
, decreasing the risk of a surprise death and that's why the advantages are higher than the disadvantages. In
consequence one
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consequence, one
of the principal benefits is give the opportunity of everyone in any part of the world has access to a
qualificated
medicine, decreasing the risk of deaths for the non-access system health
,
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,
and many cases the population without that kind of cares don't live enough to work and
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
themselves in
an
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a
working class,
for
example if
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example, if
one father of family die because of a sick which
whith
expresses the means used
with
an accurate cares is not mortal, that represents a victory to his family and in a future it will add with his work economic benefits to all around them. To add my point of view people with a longer and
digny
thickly covered with ingrained dirt or soot
dingy
deny
life
will be happy and enjoy their moments, won't live with fears about their health and possibly will
apport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
experience for the new generations, is very common that
granparents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
gives
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give
greatest moments for their relatives and if the medicine could extend their
life
it could generate a better family
,
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,
more linked and with
amazing sense
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an amazing sense
of
life
. To resume I think the advantages upper the disadvantages and the medical care should keep improving their fields and extending the
life
for a healthier and happy society."

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