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Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant example.

#believe #education #success #teachers #student’s #attitude
Relationship
Suggestion
The relationship
 between
teacher
 and
student
 is an important relationship which decides the direction of an individual's entire
life
. Most of the people
believes
Suggestion
believe
 that there is a good
teacher
 behind the success of any
student
,
however there
Accept comma addition
however, there
 are people who
believes
Suggestion
believe
student
's
attitude
 is the key factor to achieve goals in
life
. In my opinion, it would be difficult to meet goals without positive thinking and the right direction.
Paragraphs
Suggestion
The paragraphs
 below will discuss both these views in detail. Education is not limited to the concepts which are published in the books, it is knowledge which comes from the
conversion of concept
Suggestion
concept of conversion
 to the practical learnings.
This
 conversion is directed from the qualified person who has in-depth knowledge of it. A good
teacher
 is the one who transforms the theories mentioned in books to a real
life
 mechanisms.
This
 provides the insights of the topic and serves the purpose of the lecture. He understands the
student
's skills and adapt to his style of learning, so that
student
's learning got maximize.
However
, a good
teacher
 can only use multiple approaches to make the lesson
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 but it is
student's
Suggestion
the student's attitude
a student's attitude
attitude
, which is a more important factor to grasp that knowledge.
Success
Suggestion
The success
 of a
teacher
is depends
Suggestion
depends
 on the
student
's
attitude
. It is
attitude
Suggestion
an attitude
the attitude
 which decides the person's growth and his interest in that topic. With
positive
Suggestion
a positive attitude
positive attitudes
attitude
,
person
Suggestion
a person
the person
people
 can do wonders in
life
, it would help him to visualize the queries in early phase which improves his understanding
on
Suggestion
of
 that topic. To sum up
, both
Suggestion
, both in attitude
attitude
 and ways of imparting lessons are required for the best result in the education. If the approaches are good and the learning not taken with positive thinking,
results
Suggestion
the results
 would be not as per the efforts kept.

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