Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Educating children to become a well-qualified individual of society is an inevitable role of family and
school
.
However
, whether parents or teachers are more appropriate to be responsible for
this
mission still remains
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
compatible
combatable
. On the one hand, parents are the roots of children since it is considered that not only they are their kid's guardian but
also
their
first
teachers.
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Along with
Alongwith
the appearance inherited, the habits, behaviour and etiquette are
also
transferred. As children are accompanied by parents innately, their dignity is built as a combination of their family.
Additionally
, children tendentiously show off their hidden flaws in front of their parents rather than teachers.
Therefore
, parents are able to have a better acknowledgement about their children and give suitable advice or punishment, unlike those who are easily altruistic due to exquisite elements.
On the other hand
,
school
has their own
a course of conduct
path
part
. By educating children 8 hours a day with the approach of several subject, teachers can seize the opportunity to observe and evaluate their pupils in order to pique their forte and make good their shortcomings.
Besides
imparting knowledge, teachers
also
focus on enhancing creativity in kids as well as instructing them to social skills.
Hence
, inculcating an interest in
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the arts
arts
might be chosen as a profession in the future.
Finally
, discipline and punctuality are priorities in
school
, making children become responsible members of society who are courageous enough to face the consequences of their misbehaviours. In conclusion, parents and
Accept comma addition
teachers, both
teachers both
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play
plays
an integral role in children's perception and maturity. From my
the act of persecuting (especially on the basis of race or religion)
persecution
perspection
, parents are more in charge of raising them to be a good part of
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the community
community
since the bond between them are stronger than
school
are.

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