Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do up and community work to what extent do you agree? Instead of being put behind bars.

Nowadays, There are many prisoners locked down behind the bars and left idle while taking their punishment period.
However
, many of them could spend their free time on the social
service
to atone their sin while waiting for their freedom. From my point of view, These prisoners with a light
crime
or a few years of jailing should be
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allowed
allow
to
service
the community. Exploring the benefits and losses of applying the
service
task for these captives will prove
this
.
First
of all, These people could relieve their
the feeling of being bored by something tedious
boredom
bottom
bordom
with these
any specific behavior
activities
activity
activists
activitys
while taking the punishment.
Likewise
, many nations had been applied a lot of
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tasks
task
,
such
as, the sewer cleaning, the pedestrian path paving, or some farming job that could be a
service
to public and can
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provide
provided
a cheap
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
labor
to help
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with
in
many troublesome tasks. Even so, they need to be monitored to avoid the risk of escaping or the risk to cause any damage to
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the surrounding
surrounding
.
In other words
, these
a person who is confined; especially a prisoner of war
prisoners
presioners
of a light
crime
or a few years of penalty left should be the ideal target so as to have less reason to escape. On the one hand, their
service
might
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provide
provided
a better image for many post-prisoners. As many of them were going to
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be encountering
encounter
encountering
many hardships or struggling to get a job for living in the future,
for example
, many American post-prisoner repeat their
crime
because they have a hard time to find any job. In order to solve these problems, some countries
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allowed
alloweded
them to atone their sin with many
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types
type
of community works while they are taking their punishment.
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Nonetheless
Nontheless
,
this
method was working for many
Accept comma addition
celebrities, but
celebrities but
less effective on the other common captives. By
this
I mean, they have the right to have a chance to redeem for their
crime
and
also
have the right to improve their image for their future being. In conclusion, these
responsible for or chargeable with a reprehensible act
guilty
guity
men could be more useful with their duties
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in state
instate
of remaining idle behind those bars. It
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can accept
can be accepted
can be accept
that they should spend their jail period on many social services with a condition of low escaping risk. As for the
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societal
society
benefits,
this
approach could be better in
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the long term
long term
longterm
as they could have a chance to turn over a new leaf with a better life.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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