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Many students take part time jobs while studying in the university. Is this good or bad.

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In today's world, working part-time in parallel with studies is more debatable. Some people think working can hamper student curriculum while others think doing realtime work can make them independent. I believe, taking up part-time jobs has more benefits than detriments.
To begin
 with, university studies are more expensive,
hence
 taking up temporary jobs have become necessary. Students can fund their study expenses rather than depending on parents.
For example
, it is seen that students pay their tuition fees from their earned money.
Moreover
, they become more responsible is spending money than students who do not earn. The independent nature of students boosts their self-confidence and bring growth in life.
Furthermore
, working half time and the efforts they put makes them understand the importance and value of money.
This
 work experience can help them in their future decision-making. Admittedly, despite there are many positive impacts, but there are some negative impacts which cannot be neglected. University studies need undivided attention and one main reason, students get distracted from their studies, and not achieve their career goals.
Hence
, there are many cases where students fail due to their part-time jobs as they do not get enough time to study.
Second
 main reason students getting involved in illegal activities like consumption of drugs, alcohol and so on, which leads to severe consequences, and in result can lead to imprisonment. In my opinion, it is good to take part-time jobs while studying at university as long as it does not affect the studies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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