Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
In these modern days, people’s love for
music
has united them with others who have different cultures and ages. However
, I personally agree with this
statement as music
has become a tool that can be utilized to unite nation
for some reasons which are set out below.
Everyone has a different taste in Correct article usage
a nation
music
, and there are different types of music
genres, such
as K-pop, J-pop, Rock, Lofi, Jazz, and so on. Finding something in common will help them to build a relationship with others. For instance
, K-Poppers' fans can somehow manage to interact with each other globally with the help of the internet, and some of them even become friends
, despite their age and cultural differences. They even can form a fan group about a certain artist with strangers to fangirl over this
idol and to defend his idol if they get hate comments from other fan groups.
Other than contemporary music
, traditional music
has also
helped people to connect with a foreign culture. The curiosity of someone to learn about other traditional music
will open the opportunity to find new friends
and community. For example
, a year ago, there was a viral video where an American was singing an Indonesian folk song. He then
told the media that his love for Indonesia's art had attracted local children to teach him the culture’s music
. At
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end
the Indonesians loved him for his interest in the country's cultures, and he ended up with some new Add a comma
end,
friends
.
In conclusion, it seems to me that music
has brought people together globally. Through engaging with it, individuals can find new friends
and build relationships across cultures and generations. However
, it is also
important to recognize that personal preferences and cultural differences in music
may sometimes limit its unifying potential. Despite this
, the overall
ability of music
to create shared experiences and emotional connections makes it a powerful tool for fostering unity in a diverse world.Submitted by helia on
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relevant specific examples
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introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
The main points are effectively developed with specific examples, such as K-pop fans and an American singing an Indonesian folk song. These examples clearly illustrate the points.