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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. Agree or Disagree?

#communication
Although
communication
 is an
irreplacable
impossible to replace
irreplaceable
measures
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measure
 to express feeling and ideas, there is a claim that speaking is more effective than writing in order to communicate between people. Personally, I do not agree with
this
 statement because the value of both 2 types of
communication
should be consider
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should be considered
 equally. On the one hand, spoken
communication
 is vital because many reasons. The
first
 reason is that, when people talking to each other, they easily use their words in
accordant
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accordance
accord
 with their tone and personal voice in order to express the idea as well as their emotions. It is obvious that feeling the
speaker
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speaker's
 emotions
also
 help the audiences understand completely the whole idea and meaning of the
informantion
a message received and understood
information
.
For example
, when a person
annoucing
make known; make an announcement
announcing
 the birth of a child, they usually associate the news with a tone of happiness to indicate their exciting feeling to let the others know that they are expecting the child birth.
In other words
, when expressing information by speaking, the audience
tend
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tends
 to remember it speedily. As a good example,
politicants
 usually give their speed
motivatively
 in public to catch the
people
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peoples
person's
 attention. If
this
politicant
a leader engaged in civil administration
politician
just only publish
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just only publishes
 articles in
news paper
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the newspaper
newspaper
newspapers
a newspaper
, there will be no way for his succeed. 
On the other hand
,
communication
 by using writing language is extremely essential.
Firstly
, in academic perspective,
writing
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writing, communication
communication
 is a measure that used to
decribe
give a description of
describe
formaly
being in accord with established forms and conventions and requirements (as e.g. of formal dress)
formal
 and
specifictly
the quality of being specific rather than general
specificity
specifically
 all
revelant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
 information which spoken language is likely unable to achieve. For instant, when scientists want to announce to the public a new research, they have to public it on magazines or specific websites and provide all
revalant
revise or renew one's assessment
reevaluate
 data or experiments by using academic writing langue. Spoken langue is not appropriate to use because of its emotional effect which is
limmited
small in range or scope
limited
 in
scient
a distinctive odor that is pleasant
scent
scant
 langue.
Secondly
, there are many
situation
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situations
 that people can not just simply use their natural speaking,
in stead
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
, writing a letter or a formal document is more acceptable.
This
 is evident that most of
work
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the work
 related to
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 authorities required the employee must have an appropriate writing ability. In conclusion,
although
 spoken
communicaiton
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
 has
conspicuos
obvious to the eye or mind
conspicuous
 roles in our living society, written
communication
 is equally crucial.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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