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Write a letter to a local restaurant that is very noisy. In your letter Introduce yourself Describe the problem Say what actions you will take

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to you to introduce some hurdles that local society has been facing for
last
 few years from your working area. I am one of the dwellers of Naigra town and working in a cotton factory. My living place is just 500 meters away from your restaurant. First of all, the outer area of your kitchen, which is used to clean the meat and cut it into pieces is extremely noisy.
Moreover
, workers play loud music all the time
while
 working, which creates noise pollution as well. I would request you to execute some alternations in that area.
For instance
, the meat-cutting place should be covered separately or cover the whole processing section with sound soundproof shed.
This
 would help to overcome
this
 problem.I hope you will consider
this
 and make some changes as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Harpreet Kaur.
Submitted by harpreet291kaur on

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task achievement
While the response completes the task, consider providing specific examples of how the noise affects daily life, to enhance the effectiveness of the complaint.
task achievement
The letter could have a stronger impact if more emphasis is placed on the consequences of inaction and a clearer call to action for the restaurant owner.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences are directly related to it.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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