IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human life to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Experimenting on
animals
Use synonyms
 is a conventional
way
Use synonyms
 with the aim of
to
Verb problem
apply
show examples
assuring
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
product's
Change noun form
product
show examples
safety
Use synonyms
 in most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
industries. So far it has been very helpful in science's development. It may be
only
Add an article
the only
show examples
way
Use synonyms
 that help to assure
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
some important product
safety
Use synonyms
 .
This
Linking Words
 essay
dealth
Correct your spelling
dealt
with some
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
opinions for and against
this
Linking Words
 matter. Proponents claim that there is not
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
other
way
Use synonyms
 that can be useful for product testing
as well as
Linking Words
 experimenting on
animals
Use synonyms
 and
this
Linking Words
 method is the only
way
Use synonyms
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
we can
use
Use synonyms
 to assure
about
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Use synonyms
products
Change the noun form
product
show examples
safety
Use synonyms
 which had a minimum error so far. Especially in human health issues
such
Linking Words
 as
drugs
Correct article usage
the drugs
show examples
 industry using
animals
Use synonyms
 have been the best
way
Use synonyms
from
Change preposition
for
show examples
many
last
Linking Words
 years
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
now and scholars believe that animal's body
reacting
Replace the word
reactions
show examples
 after
experiment
Correct article usage
an experiment
show examples
helpes
Correct your spelling
help
them to
aware
Add a missing verb
be aware
show examples
from
Change preposition
of
show examples
Use synonyms
products
Change noun form
products'
product's
show examples
 side effects.
Beside
Replace the word
Besides
show examples
this
Linking Words
 , they
also
Linking Words
 believe that a human's life is far more important than
Use synonyms
animals
Fix the agreement mistake
animal
show examples
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 ,
this
Linking Words
 method led to many concerns regarding about
animals
Use synonyms
safety
Use synonyms
 . Critics believe that because
animals
Use synonyms
 are alive, definitely they suffer from
these kind
Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
show examples
 of experiments and we have no right to endanger the
life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
show examples
 of
animals
Use synonyms
 and these experiments should be
stoped
Correct your spelling
stopped
show examples
.
Also
Linking Words
 experimenting on
animals
Use synonyms
 may have not exact results and
finally
Linking Words
, don't be trusted, so if scientists
use
Use synonyms
 these results
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 produce new
products
Use synonyms
 may
be caused
Wrong verb form
cause
show examples
 serious problems. in
conclusion
Add a comma
conclusion,
show examples
humans
Fix the agreement mistake
human
show examples
 and
Use synonyms
animals
Change the noun form
animal
show examples
 life is important. it is not easy to decide about any of them but in my opinion, there is no need to
use
Use synonyms
animals
Use synonyms
 for testing all
kind
Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
show examples
of
products
Use synonyms
 and we can
use
Use synonyms
 those just for essential
products
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as drugs that have many serious impacts on human health.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Animal testing
  • Laboratory experiments
  • Safety and efficacy
  • Ethical concerns
  • Moral responsibility
  • In vitro testing
  • Computer modeling
  • Human reactions
  • Dependence on animals
  • Humane treatment
  • 3Rs principle (Replacement, Reduction, Refinement)
  • Reliable method
  • Innovative methods
  • Sustainable research practices
  • Animal experimentation
  • Data crucial
What to do next:
Look at other essays: