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some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human life to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #scientists #laboratory #guarantee #products #life
Experimenting on
animals
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way
 with the aim of
to
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assuring
about
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product's
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safety
 in most
of
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the
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industries. So far it has been very helpful in science's development. It may be
only
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the only
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way
 that help to assure
about
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some important product
safety
 .
This
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dealth
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dealt
with some
of
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opinions for and against
this
 matter. Proponents claim that there is not
the
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other
way
 that can be useful for product testing
as well as
 experimenting on
animals
 and
this
 method is the only
way
which
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we can
use
 to assure
about
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products
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safety
 which had a minimum error so far. Especially in human health issues
such
 as
drugs
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the drugs
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 industry using
animals
 have been the best
way
from
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many
last
 years
to
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now and scholars believe that animal's body
reacting
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 after
experiment
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an experiment
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helpes
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help
them to
aware
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from
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of
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products
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products'
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 side effects.
Beside
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this
 , they
also
 believe that a human's life is far more important than
animals
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animal
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.
On the other hand
 ,
this
 method led to many concerns regarding about
animals
safety
 . Critics believe that because
animals
 are alive, definitely they suffer from
these kind
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 of experiments and we have no right to endanger the
life
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 of
animals
 and these experiments should be
stoped
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.
Also
 experimenting on
animals
 may have not exact results and
finally
, don't be trusted, so if scientists
use
 these results
for
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 produce new
products
 may
be caused
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 serious problems. in
conclusion
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humans
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human
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 and
animals
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animal
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 life is important. it is not easy to decide about any of them but in my opinion, there is no need to
use
animals
 for testing all
kind
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kinds
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of
products
 and we can
use
 those just for essential
products
such
 as drugs that have many serious impacts on human health.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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