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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In the recent years, the number of
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abortion
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abortions
 is increasing all over the world, making
this
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 one of the most controversial topics. Some people argue that
abortion
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 should be legalized, while others are against it. Personally, I am in the opinion the earlier idea. On the one hand, people are against the legalization of
abortion
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 say that it is a kind of killing human and damaging women’s
health
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. According to their theory, an embryo, even in the early stage of pregnancy is a life form and
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 it has the right to live. For
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 reason,
abortion
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also
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 means murdering a human.
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, there are a lot of women
sufferred
undergo or be subjected to
suffered
 from
abortion
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.
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, some women lose the ability to be pregnant or someone found death because of
abortion
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 accidents.
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, a lot of people claim that legalizing
abortion
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 is protecting women’s
health
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. Sometimes, pregnancy is a result of unexpected reason meanwhile the women is not healthy enough or have not been equipped enough to give birth.
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, a teenager is
pregnant while
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pregnant, while
 still studying at high school, she is just a child
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 her body is not mature enough to deliver the baby. In
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 situation, legalization of
abortion
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 ensures that the women
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have performed
are performing
perform
 the surgery of
abortion
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at
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in
 the hospital with the best medical condition. It not only gives the necessary care to recover their
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health but
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health, but
aslo
in addition
also
 gives the chance to be
mother
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a mother
 again when they are ready. In conclusion,
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 remains a controversial topic with arguments both in favour and against it. Personally, I support the legalization of
abortion
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 in order to protect women’s
health
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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