Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

There is an opinion that every young
person
should be taught to be good parents in schools. Personally, I disagree with
this
view because of some certain reasons.
To begin
with, the primary purpose of school is to educate people to become decent civilians with knowledge and skills to carry a job. The main subjects in school,
for example
, math, literary, physical, foreign language and life skills which
takes
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take
children most time of their day. There is very little time for extracurricular activities.
Furthermore
, the most students of
school
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the school
are adolescences who are not mature enough to be
parenting
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parents
. They should be taught about the gender difference and sexual security to avoid having a baby at
this
age.
On the other hand
, it is said that parents are the models of their offspring. That means children will watch and imitate their parents' daily
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
and activities. There is a high possibility that children will become exactly the
person
like their parents are.
For example
, a child grows up in a family with an alcoholic father who usually beats his wife and kids, tends to become a violent
person
.
Therefore
, it is necessary to guide adults to become
good
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the best
better
parent
instead
of teaching for
young
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young people
the young person
young persons
person
. In order to become good parents, there are several things need to be considered. The
first
and the most important thing is the love for
baby
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the baby
babies
.
Secondly
, it is the knowledge to care babies
such
as how to choose the
nutrition
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nutritious
food, how to cook the meal, how to take care a child when he gets sick.
Additionally
, parents should need to communicate with their children and be able to educate them. In conclusion, for the reason I have mentioned above, I believe that teaching
young
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a young person
person
to be
parent
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a parent
is not a good idea in
schools
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the schools
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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